As I walk slowly into the ancient precarious bathroom I see
slimy old ruined toothbrushes staring at me.
Tilted sideways in a cracked brown cup, the toothbrushes
waited to be used. I grab an old worn, broken bristle, faded
toothbrush. Smothering it with crystal clear minty toothpaste.
I wondered if this is my toothbrush. It was mine but it was
the wrong colour.
My first thought was “omg noooo!!” It was my brothers old
slimy germ filled toothbrush. I instantly throw it away swiftly
in the rubbish and wash my contaminated hands.
I never wanna do that again.
By Hannah
Hi Hannah, I like your story, you have added great details, and it is very interesting. Something to think about is stay in one tense, as you jump around with the tenses in this story. From Ethan, H.I.S
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