Friday, May 3, 2019

Ground Moles by Kyle

Ground Moles

We step through the leaves and into the clearing.
All I can see are ground moles rising from the black ashey ground.  They start moving into the hill like they are looking for something or someone.  I walk up to take a little peck to find out what. They where gone. But there was a trial of slim running down the hill.  So I start to track them down so I can lern more about these creature so I grab a cup so I can take some slime back to my lab to tist it so we really now what these things are capabil of doing when they are attacked or been seen alone in open site.  With there behaver? Now looking at my map trying to find out were I am but this island is not my map so where am I.

By Kyle


  1. Kyle,
    I love the narrator's bravery and curiosity in your piece. The end was unexpected because the 'scientist' seemed so sure, but the map exposed a challenge for certain! Your work makes me want to read more. Keep writing. Mrs. G., Team 100, Guilderland, NY, USA

  2. hello Kyle you have some great description in your writing. One thing to improve your writing is to read through your writing carefully to make sure it makes senesce.