The Alien Men
Walking around a forest that looks to be from the Lord
of the rings.
Then out of the blue this smell shoots right up my nose.
The smell is so intense that it makes rotten meat smell
good and that’s NOT good.I spin around like a tornado
almost falling to the wet muddy ground but I stick the
landing the sight I see as I slowly look up practically
makes my eyeballs pop out of my head. It’s like some
alien men trying to rise up from the earth and take it over.
What are we going to do.
By Hayley
Kia ora Hayley - (Stars) your writing has got some vivid images in it and I pictured your 'eyeballs popping out of your head'. I liked your simile. (Wish) Maybe you could use some commas, fullstops and a question mark in the end part of your writing. Keep up the good work.
ReplyDeletegood job.
ReplyDeletei like the way that you put detail into your story.