Friday, May 3, 2019

The Horde by Caleb

The Horde

Misty mysterious grounds surround me as my sore blistered feet
struggle to move the stench flys up my nose as I take a deep
breath and think to myself I need to rest. I continue to walk until
I come to an opening where there seems to be some sort of rotten
tree trunks or beaver corpses.

So that’s what what the smell was I say quietly to myself but at least
here’s somewhere to sit so I take a seat. I hear something ruall
behind the logs “whos there “.I say no one answers before I get a
chance to get up and investigate a horde of beavers comes out and
runs at me and starts to rip me apart “HELP” I scream...

By Caleb

3 comments:

  1. WOW i felt like i was getting attacked great powerful writing.
    Next time try to use short snappy sentences,because if you do long sentences it seems to start to drag on.
    Nice work Ryan

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  2. WOW i felt like i was getting attacked great powerful writing.
    Next time try to use short snappy sentences,because if you do long sentences it seems to start to drag on.
    Nice work Ryan

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  3. i really like the descriptive words in the story, and i wish there was like simmilies or puncuation to describe whats happeing, you know-Zayden

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